Didn't run properly
It kept pausing and slowing down. I think you way overused filter effects, which ate the fuck out of my system resources, but it seemed to slow down massively at seemingly random places. Sorry if it's just my machine fucking up.
The animation was ok but I'm sick to death of these types of movies. Nothing to scream about.
Na its not your computer it did it on mine 2 =/
Really not too bad
Ok some pointers:
Don't use white backgrounds. Particularly not in the first scene as this will put people off.
Animate at a higher framerate. Never use anything lower than 12fps for frame-by-frame. A lot of people use 24fps and animate every other frame for frame-by-frame.
Use much thinner lines; thick wobbly lines are horrible to look at.
Work a little harder on the drawings- add more detail.
Think about your use of colour more. Try using dark and pastel colours to create a sense of atmosphere.
It'd be sweet...
...if you finished it.
Feedback
Newgrounds doesn't need any more 4 second movies of poorly drawn stick figures fighting on a white background. Try just watching some of the movies that pass on the portal, and then tell yourself what you're doing wrong.
Hey, this passed didn't it?
Sub-Mediocre
I looked at some of your other submissions- it looks like you are actually serious about this animating business, so I figured I'd try giving you a helpful review:
You seem to have a half-decent grasp of movement, what's mainly holding you back is your drawing (I know you know) and concept of cinematic.
I think what you would benefit from the most would be studying "good" content (I mean like top 50 stuff) and trying to pick out common techniques, comparing it to your own work. Do the reverse by blam/protecting to figure out what not to do. A great skill is being able to judge your own work as if it were someone else's.
Do the same for your drawing style; perhaps have a browse around deviantArt or look at some popular web-comics. Trying to copy other people's drawings is a good way of developing your style (this is just for practice; don't steal).
You seem to have trouble differentiating what you actually see, and what you remember or think you see; you are drawing symbols rather than objects. Do some life drawings. This will help immensely even if you're trying to develop a cartoon style, as cartoons are merely a simplified or adapted reality, rather than something entirely separate.
Also, when you're thinking up what to animate, try to imagine it like it was a Hollywood movie; hopefully this will give you ideas for the cinematic composition. This is a case of thinking past the mere actions that you want to animate, to how you want them to be seen, or how best to display them. Then you need to start thinking about drawing all this together to create style, atmosphere, mood etc.
And that's about all I can be bothered to write. Take it one step at a time and practice a fuckload. Hope some of this was at least mildly helpful...
Thank you, it was verry helpful.
Horrible
Nothing about this flash is good. I'd give you some tips but I think you'd be better off just never animating again.
Dude, i paid money for flash, GTFO
Get somebody to translate this
This could really enlighten a lot of the kids that browse Newgrounds. Unfortunately this is an English website and not many people speak Spanish.
Not particularly entertaining
It's well put together, all looks very clean and the cinematic is half decent at least. The graphical and animation style, while miles better than the trailer, was still way too simple, and the colour scheme wasn't very nice to look at.
I can't really say it was at all funny, and the style didn't quite justify the uber-cheesiness of it all. The lack of sound along with how the music was done was really quite irritating too.
I don't much like the way you draw figures; give your characters proper faces. The use of gradients could possibly have been good if you had chosen less vibrant colours, but be careful not to over-use gradients.
Work on adding detail to your backgrounds and characters be careful not to use bright electric colours all over the place. Try think about cinematic lighting, less obtrusive subtitles, sound effects.
Aesthetics aside, I doubt your ability to make something that's entertaining on the content side of things
I had to vote 0 on this
For several reasons:
1. It's a trailer. This belongs in the alphas section.
2. It had no actual animation
3. The drawings were... simple at best
I look forward to seeing an actual episode; the story sounds fun, but I'm sceptical you'll be able to pull off anything watchable judging by this.
yeah...We were going for a kind of "Wall painting" feel; like you're uncovering some hidden story from long ago. I assure you that the actual episodes contain more than stick figures on a wall. there is also more color, personality, and animation in the actual episodes. oh, and this was originally designed to be the opener for each individual episode for the first series, but for file size and overall conveniency reasons, here it is. Episode 1 comes out on Monday, so plant your feet and throw me another criticism!
Not horrible
Your drawing style is unoriginal and unimpressive, the animation was pretty ugly, the lip syncing wasn't really in sync, but the backgrounds were at least half decent and it was pretty well put together.
I would recommend against 1-frame pose transitions, and take a little more time and care actually drawing your characters.
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